| 2007-11-21 11:26:31 |
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not bad, but take care with your phrasing; it becomes a little repetetive, spoiling the flow of your otherwise well written story. I liked the tenderness and genuineness of what you've written, almost as though it happened...? |
| 2007-12-08 18:20:15 |
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I enjoyed this story a lot, especially when they were in the woods just off the path and they saw the mother take her son's hand and place it in just the right spot. It was at this point that I came hard and long. I loved it - more please. |
| 2007-12-10 14:56:15 |
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I love it when daddy is so gentle with his little girl! Truely believable that she would love it and want more. Hard to believe this was a fantasy and not something at least partly experienced. |
| 2007-12-13 13:09:19 |
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why did he wait until she was 14 before penetrating her with his meagre 6 inches. if it had been me, we would have done it when she was 10 or 11. she was obviously wanting it bad at that age. |
| 2007-12-20 09:38:37 |
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We would so much have liked the daughter to have a longer exploration and discovery of her father's cock and its growth into FULL erection in her small hands before it was introduced into her,by then,ravenous wet swollen pussy,Excellent story!!!!!!! |