| 2007-09-05 23:25:15 |
Mom Sucks Dad part 2
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meh i like the ideas and some of the action, some of your words are kinda off so somtimes had to read somthing two time to get what your saying, but it still is pretty good 8/10 |
| 2007-09-06 10:28:40 |
Mom Sucks Dad part 2
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Oh god, very nice and I think you should continue the story. |
| 2007-09-06 10:28:59 |
Mom Sucks Dad part 2
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good premise, horrible spelling and decide what tense the story is in (is it happening now?did it already happen?) |
| 2007-09-06 21:50:27 |
Mom Sucks Dad part 2
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Where did you go to school, or did you go at all? The poor spelling ruined it for me. By the way, the plural of Mom is Moms. You don't need an apostrophe. Terrible spelling. Just terrible. |
| 2007-09-06 23:13:46 |
Mom Sucks Dad part 2
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you need to make your stories longer |