| 2007-10-05 21:24:20 |
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pretty good story dude, you could work on your editing and spelling mistakes but all in all was a decent story, can't wait to check out pt2. 8.5/10 |
| 2007-10-06 11:43:48 |
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Well pretty good .. I enjoyed it ! |
| 2007-10-06 16:34:05 |
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I like the way you write & I don't care if you spell good or not, I know what you mean. I like the way she says no, and means yes. I know shes going to let him finger fuck her as they drive and at the resturant to, probably play and finger herself as they drive?
[put more incest into it] have them visit her mom & find her sister & her kids there too [ mom remembers me saying all sons like to make their moms feel good
& she smiles thinking of her sister & her mom?}
Hurry with the next part & make it hot !! How much longer do we have to wait for part 2? |
| 2007-10-07 10:14:11 |
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that was like the smae that happened with me but with my cousin i was at her house and she had been shopping and caught me tsaring at her getting changed then she told me to go over to her then i finger fucked her |
| 2007-10-07 13:05:12 |
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Nice, sweet, tender. Now get on with the fucking or I'm gonna kick your ass! 8/10. |