| 2007-11-05 10:38:31 |
Inside Me: C06
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omg |
| 2007-11-14 01:13:08 |
Inside Me: C06
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man i was so hard while reading this |
| 2008-01-26 00:14:10 |
Inside Me: C06
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your an awesome writer, but I like NOC and CAMRYN |
| 2007-10-28 08:46:11 |
My Favorite Babysitter, Part II
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i'd hoped this'd be better than the first part, but no...use paragraphs, and make sure the descriptions fit the ages...what you are writing about is a GILF...make her 35-50 and you might have a believable story |
| 2007-10-28 09:29:49 |
My Favorite Babysitter, Part II
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Gave up reading after first 12 lines as found that without correct grammar my eyes could not follow the "Story" maybe you would consider going back to English Grammar classes before you write the next story or chapter? |