| 2008-01-02 20:36:40 |
Belle_(3)
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Ehhhh. Way too corny for me. As soon as tinker belle came along.. I stopped. I won't rate it because I didn't finish it.. but the first 10-15 paragraphs were definitely a 3/10. |
| 2008-01-02 22:59:48 |
Belle_(3)
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its ok if you can get past the gayness of it, you write like a horny 6th grader |
| 2008-01-02 23:35:07 |
Belle_(3)
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Way too many adjectives used. An amusing plot, interesting twist, but seriously... I just laughed a couple times. It's okay to just say "I orgasmed inside her" rather than "As I orgasmed I filled her body with seminal juices! My cock exploded with sperm and semen!" |
| 2008-01-02 23:52:58 |
Belle_(3)
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plz continue |
| 2008-01-03 00:11:17 |
Belle_(3)
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wtf...piece of shit |