| 2008-03-05 01:05:49 |
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freakin fantastic |
| 2008-03-06 07:18:04 |
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its really fantastic an awsome |
| 2008-03-06 09:17:59 |
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this srory roooooooooooooooooooocks |
| 2008-03-08 00:54:23 |
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Could use some language refinement, some of the wording came off blunt, where it should have flowed.
Could have use slightly more back story.
Other than those, quite good.
7/10 |
| 2008-03-08 04:41:57 |
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fucking great story mate
hurry up with part 2
10/10 |