| 2004-10-31 10:16:36 |
Fuck Toy_(0)
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Nice. Perhaps the best use of run on sentences on the net. More description of the TOY in the begining would help. (Hair and eye color)? Nice. |
| 2005-12-27 05:06:28 |
Fuck Toy_(0)
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i liked it was damn hot |
| 2004-02-14 01:29:08 |
Fuck Toy_(1)
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Too much reporting. "He did this then he did this she lay there, she whimpered". Again, there's no beginning or end just a big middle. Take the time to actually write a story and not report the latest fantasy. Foreplay works in writing too. |
| 2004-03-28 14:46:07 |
Fuck Toy_(1)
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That's true. Too much reporting but ok. |
| 2004-04-07 16:10:23 |
Fuck Toy_(1)
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Wait....so was it a real person or a literal fuck doll? |