| 2004-06-06 14:20:25 |
Inbetween my Thighs
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Interesting.You need only work on rythem and ryhme. Keep it up. |
| 2004-06-06 18:51:47 |
Inbetween my Thighs
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sucks a fat dick |
| 2004-06-08 23:43:12 |
Inbetween my Thighs
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Poetry is difficult. Unfortunately most people associate poetry with purity of thought and subtle economic use of words. None of which will make sense to you. The missing rhythm and rhyme was also its death chime. |
| 2004-06-13 23:22:11 |
Inbetween my Thighs
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rhyme is not the key to poetry. Neither is rhythm. But you must have at least one. You sound like my girlfriend, but pride or no, she can't stay quiet to save her life. |
| 2004-06-19 13:08:53 |
Inbetween my Thighs
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Your poems show talent but if your work is read aloud, its really hard to distinguish it between a piece of prose or a poem. You just need to work on a rhythm! |