| 2004-10-23 14:50:17 |
The Invasion of Nicondria
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I liked this one. Needs more sex through. |
| 2005-01-23 05:13:27 |
The Invasion of Nicondria
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bullshit |
| 2006-02-25 04:11:34 |
The Invasion of Nicondria
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It wasn't all that bad. at least it had a story compared to others. It just needs to be easier on the eyes, it need more clearer paragrpahs |
| 2007-06-09 22:22:43 |
The Invasion of Nicondria
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In the last paragraph u say that Krasis pumped his semen in the preistesses pussy. He wasnt even in her pussy. In the second to the last paragragh she takes him in her ass, Uve got so much sex going on at one time, even you, the author, cant even keep it all straight. |
| 2008-04-03 18:33:31 |
The Invasion of Nicondria
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you went from 6 pack to 8 pack to 6 pack to 8i pack. nothing was consistant |