| 2006-02-15 13:23:44 |
Mother's Girl
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Last anonymous comment. Of course girls of 25 live with their mothers if circumstances so dictate. Mind you if I had a son or a daughter who couldn't spell better than you I'd throw them out on the street! Serious comments/criticisms welcome. Arseholes/dickheads and fuckwits generally save your typing fingers for picking your noses. |
| 2006-08-25 08:37:36 |
Mother's Girl
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Not bad but the seduction process should have been included because that's the hottest part of lesbian incest erotica. Also, most lesbian stories especially lesbian incest should culminate in some kind of anal sex. |
| 2006-10-08 00:20:04 |
Mother's Girl
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Damn good story Ricardo... nice detail,,, keep up the fine work... |
| 2007-01-20 12:05:09 |
Mother's Girl
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I love your stories Ricardo...I'm a older horny gal who has written a few stories ..not as good as yours though. |
| 2004-06-08 23:47:17 |
Lovers
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Line 1-7 starts well but then line 8 needs work. The variable line lengths and especially the lengthening of lines kills the beat. Tempo is vital for a poem of this nature. You need to build up to the climax. There is nothing wrong with short lines. |