| 2004-06-20 19:46:04 |
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You know what kills me about so many who comment? They play off as so "appalled" and "disgusted"... yet they knew the subject matter when they chose to read it! Maybe the intelligence level lies less in the ones who comment and more in those who chose to bear all and share with us their wonderfully wicked, not so "closeted" imaginations. Personally, this is not my "thing" however, curiousity is and I thought you did a phenomenal job.... I look forward top reading more of your work! |
| 2004-06-20 22:46:22 |
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Well, if it's honest criticism that you want, here it is. The story on writing merit alone is decent, but not fabulous. You have grammatical errors and spelling errors. The suspense only half-heartedly builds and we only glimpse a very small portion of the true twisted mind of the character. I think you tend to "inform" you readers about your characters, instead of building your characters in such a way that your reader can get to know, infer and deduce the nature of your characters. As for content, well, whatever blows your hair back, as long as you maintain a vast distance between your fantasy and reality. |
| 2004-06-22 06:59:07 |
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Holy Shit people when u read this u knew it would have that kind of stuff in it, i liked it. if you dont like it dont read it |
| 2004-06-22 20:45:45 |
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I was little scared by it and I won't lie!!! Creepy and now I will always lock all my doors and windows. I shall also close my blinds when I play with myself. |
| 2004-06-24 01:14:41 |
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fucked up but good story |