| 2005-12-16 15:16:47 |
DEVIRGINATING MY NEIGHBOR
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it had a good base but then u fucked it up by getting in to no detail |
| 2006-12-31 02:08:55 |
DEVIRGINATING MY NEIGHBOR
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| 2007-03-30 02:44:26 |
DEVIRGINATING MY NEIGHBOR
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I think buddy boy has a little too much of an obsession with anal...but still, the story is top notch! Great initial base story. 8/10 |
| 2007-11-10 15:21:49 |
DEVIRGINATING MY NEIGHBOR
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ehh too much talk abt anal, and u shouldve talked about other characteristics abt her. 6 out of 10 |
| 2004-07-11 22:41:09 |
Lustful Desires for Annie part 1
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Use shorter paragraphs: put spaces between them. Your grammar needs some work. You can request admin to repost it. Email them the corrected version. It smacks of fixation involving counterfactual thinking, but it's good to have positive memories. If the rating is less than 3 don't post a sequel. Work on making it more coherent and improve the pacing. |