| 2004-07-24 13:56:32 |
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you want to see the hottest porn movie' get Totally Tianna 'she has to be the hottest star of all time my pussy tingles every-time i see her |
| 2004-07-25 23:10:37 |
Lustful Desires for Annie part 1
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good not grate |
| 2004-08-11 10:43:27 |
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Its nice to read a story with a touch of romance and setting the scene decsription. I would have liked to have heard more of how the friendship developed so we could get more emotionally attached to the characters, but hey this is a porn site and not an a-level literature assignment (note to jack). In the future as well when the action does start to get steamy don't use phrases like ''i wanna stick my cock into her virgin pussy'' just ruined the whole mood. I'll read part 2 before I give a rating :P |
| 2004-10-04 17:19:20 |
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I liked how you took your time and included lots of background. i could picture it happeing. good jod |
| 2005-05-16 21:25:39 |
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Well, was really really well written. Not grammar or spelling wise, but the style. try a different plot, it didnt come out so well, but your detail is great. if u try hard u will go places beyond porn stories. |