| 2005-06-02 10:52:07 |
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i liked the theme, but i can tell you right now that you cant fuck someone in the arse, fist fuck them, and lick under their tits at the same time. It is a physical impossibility, especially with someone as large as you describe. Otherwise, shit and piss is just good clean fun. |
| 2005-06-02 22:47:12 |
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This story is poorly written, which makes it too distracting to enjoy. |
| 2005-06-03 12:55:50 |
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i liked the story i thought it was awsome |
| 2005-06-04 15:53:10 |
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that was really good, write moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee... except forget the vomit stuff, and blood. but it was good it gave me a ahrd |
| 2005-06-12 15:05:02 |
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Good storyline, try to go into more detail. Don't just TELL the reader what's happening, SHOW them. |