| 2004-12-14 18:28:13 |
Paying Your Debt
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good story but it needs smoothing out |
| 2007-07-18 03:20:47 |
Paying Your Debt
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that was a pretty cool story |
| 2004-10-03 21:39:07 |
Pleasure on the Shore
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English is obviously not your first language is it? You did ok but you need more practice with sentence structure. Good try tho. Was pretty interesting all in all...careful with extra long paragraphs they are hard on the eyes :) |
| 2004-10-12 10:51:37 |
Pleasure on the Shore
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Great story. And don't worry about the grammar, you'll learn. And as for Adamon, at least Zafar Ullah tried... It's easy giving remarks, isn't it? |
| 2005-01-06 07:30:20 |
Pleasure on the Shore
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THIS SHIT SUCKS WORST THEN A HARRY POTTER BOOK! |