| 2004-11-23 04:19:41 |
Mistress Kelly
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I think the premise of the story was good and the different topics touched upon make great 'wack your carrot' material. The entire composition could really use a spell checker and with a little more development (topics more than plot) could become a good mini novel. Stay with it. |
| 2006-04-03 03:01:33 |
Mistress Kelly
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such a nasty little roommate scenario for us to read. Well done. Take a bow. |
| 2006-04-17 18:15:52 |
Mistress Kelly
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You need to learn how to use quotation marks.. and use a spellchecker before you submit anything |
| 2004-09-29 18:34:52 |
Double Assault
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THAT WAS ALOD OF BOLLAKS |
| 2004-12-27 12:45:46 |
Double Assault
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Really, well think it needs a 100% re-write. Bullshit |