| 2004-10-15 21:17:45 |
Surfside (chapter one)
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Great story, very hot and well written. Lets have more....chapter two if you have it. |
| 2004-10-15 21:35:15 |
Surfside (chapter one)
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your story was good, but the only thing is that it was a bit too long. but even though it was good |
| 2004-10-15 22:07:26 |
Surfside (chapter one)
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good discriptive word use, visualized the scene at China Beach, fog,sand,ragged trees and the lovers. |
| 2004-10-15 22:19:40 |
Surfside (chapter one)
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Hot. I ended up with Kevin's condition. If you don't or won't post part two, I'd love to have a copy e-mailed. My eyes only...won't pass it around, in case you ever publish on paper. |
| 2004-10-15 23:17:14 |
Surfside (chapter one)
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really great ,get me the second chapter please. |