| 2004-12-11 20:34:49 |
How it should be but isn't always
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You fucking bastard- That was my sister. You got her pregnat that night. |
| 2004-12-11 23:06:17 |
How it should be but isn't always
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Good story . Well written. |
| 2004-12-12 00:17:30 |
How it should be but isn't always
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nice story |
| 2004-12-12 08:04:39 |
How it should be but isn't always
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OK most of the people reading obviously cant see your flaws! It was a well written story but u had some definite grammar as well as spelling errors. You had good detail but sometimes I got lost when you were trying to describe something. Also when you got to the actual "sex" part it was too short, you just had to drag it out longer dude. 6/10 |
| 2004-12-12 09:06:03 |
How it should be but isn't always
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6/10 man you did some spelling wrong, not enough hardcore and for god sakes make you tow get in bed and do it until you both become exausted! |