| 2005-03-11 11:38:41 |
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Not bad, darlin', but it reads a bit like a Penthouse Forum letter. Maybe a little more background on how you became such a slut and why you were so suddenly willing to be gang-fucked would be nice. |
| 2005-03-11 16:30:30 |
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hehe, that's the problem with me... when i read these stories, i always skip the "plot" and head straight for the sex - so when i write i do the same thing. so more plot would be a GOOD thing would it? ;) thanks for the comment. |
| 2005-03-11 22:10:30 |
Julie and the team part 1
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pretty good. keep up the good work, i'm looking foward to part 2 |
| 2005-03-12 05:19:58 |
Julie and the team part 1
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well tim havig AIDs, ends up giving it to all the other guys so thier lives are ruined. |
| 2005-03-12 05:33:45 |
Julie and the team part 1
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well that's pretty sad, "the ending"... those poor guys! still, at least they're not you. that would be a much worse fate. :) thanks for the comment! |