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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2005-03-30 23:11:46 | Real Juicy Pussy | great story 10/10 |
| 2005-03-31 16:17:41 | Real Juicy Pussy | great story, love to suck |
| 2005-04-01 03:33:40 | Real Juicy Pussy | Third person rarely works. Believe me, I am an editor. You have the potential to be great! You obviously have a good education, but you need more experience. Picture it in your mind before you write. Give your characters personality. Describe the surroudings. Make sure your sentences flow smoothly. You will be great if you keep trying. People like you, are the reason I'm in here. I'm searching for a writer. |
| 2005-04-01 11:21:27 | Real Juicy Pussy | Thanks for the vote of confidence. Send an email, I am interested. You are absolutly corrent in that I need more experience, that is what I am doing here -nice to get immediate feedback. I enjoy writing. Read my other stories too, I wrote this one from the complaints of too long and not enough action. I went a little too far in keeping the details out; still homing in on what readers want. |
| 2005-04-02 04:50:03 | Real Juicy Pussy | Everyone is searching basically for vivid, detailed writing which describes sex down to the beads of persperation sliding down one's skin. And, also, I don't think sensuality is too appreciated here, sadly...people enjoy the display of carnal wanton and lust. But either way, good story, you have much potential that you've shown you're openly willing to cultivate. Work on that. |