| 2005-06-16 16:20:59 |
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The story was too shallow. Not that it lacked any penetration, but it needed to have an exploration of the smell, taste, touch and sound during the act. Details add realism. |
| 2005-06-16 16:36:43 |
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the first one was better even if it was short. you got off track with the dog getting into it. |
| 2005-06-23 08:20:03 |
Daddy got Caught!! (better)
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dull.... wake me if you write anything worth while |
| 2005-08-02 01:30:53 |
Daddy got Caught!! (better)
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i loved it but it was too short right more |
| 2005-10-19 02:48:38 |
Daddy got Caught!! (better)
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WHAT THE FUCK A DOG FUCKIN A CHICK DO EVERY ONE A FAVOR AND SHOOT YOURSELF |