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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2005-05-26 17:06:56 | Scary dreams arn't so bad | who is Jimmy Hendrix??? JIMI!!! With an I!!! I am anal about this, people fucking up great musicians name. Kudos on the good band choices tho. 6/10. |
| 2005-05-27 06:50:30 | Scary dreams arn't so bad | lol dude how old are u???but it waz a nice story 10/10 |
| 2005-05-27 12:30:07 | Scary dreams arn't so bad | if they are living in the same house with his parents dont you think screaming that loud would wake his parents up and have them come into the room? ... and only talk about the story saying stuff like "Background info is just fun." kills it and tool sucks .... but just saying 8th graders isnt enough give ages and looks ... but having them young is good |
| 2005-05-27 20:15:29 | Scary dreams arn't so bad | Dead Kennedys, Tool, Pink Floyd, Led Zeppelin, and Jimmy Hendrix is not fucking hardcore you fucking idiot. god damn i hate people. you're a complete fucking douchebag. if i could put 0/10 i would you dumbass bitch |
| 2005-05-29 21:59:33 | Scary dreams arn't so bad | Look, I've been critiquing on this site for a long time now and ALWAYS under the same pseudo. Great job on a first time story i loved it. second, i have to agree with the others, a little more detail but don't overload it. thirdly, more sex, you rushed the act, that's never good. granted he blew twice but you need to make it longer. Now you had an awesome story here and i give you tons of props on it. you just asked for things to work on. lastly, don't ever, ever let anyone tell you to change your style of writing ex. the age and types of ppl and things you write about. that's for you. just watch your spelling and structure and your timeline is also important. that is all. I say again i loved it 9/10. waiting for more. |