| 2005-10-04 10:43:37 |
My Daughter Jen
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Yet again i agree with archaic. hee knows exactly wat im thinking but the cunt always comments first :P poor story. 3/10 |
| 2005-10-04 16:11:29 |
My Daughter Jen
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wdf man she was sucking her fathers cock then in next paragraph she sucking ron's cock again and didn't say anything of a switch then in next paragraph her dad is squirting cum in her pussy and it did't even say he started fucking her... you were a shit writer then a good one now you just gone back to being shit again... |
| 2005-10-04 21:58:27 |
My Daughter Jen
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the theme was great, could use better structure and spelling the sex part was hot though |
| 2005-10-06 16:43:26 |
My Daughter Jen
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story... makes no sense... jumps around everywhere... augh. |
| 2005-10-06 19:26:13 |
My Daughter Jen
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Yes it is crappy and jumps around. I did that on purpose for the perfect writer/editor's who just read the stories to tear people down to make themselves feel better. Most people enjoy these stories, see them for what they are, ENTERTAINMENT! I work with terminal patients all day, 5 days a week. This is a hobby, a stress release. I don't get paid for this either. So I am not going to worry about perfect gramar, dialouge, sentence structure or plot lines. Titman Al, I am working on a story just for you as thanks for your positive support. have a nice day. |