| 2005-09-30 23:41:48 |
Fantasy about my girlfriend
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holy crap i need a good fucking |
| 2005-10-01 04:26:31 |
Fantasy about my girlfriend
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That was really well done. Thank you oh thank you for not writing in the first person (not that I have not done it too). A few little things, don't get in such a hurry, the transition from school, to daydream, to voyour, to his house was pretty tough to follow. These two needed a little more charecter description as well. there was a lot more story availible to you, next time, run with it. It just had to be a cheerleading skirt, didn't it. Well done, keep writing. |
| 2005-10-01 08:41:19 |
Fantasy about my girlfriend
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Pretty good, the story was great, just a little more detail during the sex and some more description for the characters 7/10 |
| 2005-10-01 10:17:17 |
Fantasy about my girlfriend
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i masturbated when i read this story. it needs more details... |
| 2005-10-02 11:14:23 |
Fantasy about my girlfriend
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BORING.........IT HAD ME NODDING LIKE A JUNKIE........KEEP YOUR REAL JOB OK?? |