| 2005-11-21 13:32:49 |
My baby's cuming to visit
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try spacing the story out more |
| 2005-11-21 18:16:00 |
My baby's cuming to visit
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Yo, pixsdaleprechau whatever, whaz ur story? |
| 2005-11-22 06:29:44 |
My baby's cuming to visit
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"CONSTRUCTIVE" YOU IN A HURRY OR SOMETHING? BAM BAM THANK YOU MAM? |
| 2005-11-22 06:35:44 |
My baby's cuming to visit
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So Pixsdaleprechau, you want "critisism constructional". Do you mean "criticism" and "constructive"? Here's some: learn to spell, learn some basic grammar, and learn to put it together. Until then, don't post any more. |
| 2005-11-22 22:23:53 |
My baby's cuming to visit
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thanks teach. one problem you critiqued my post not my story but thank you for the effort. |