| 2005-11-30 11:58:15 |
My Vampire Mistress
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The story is good but could have been a little longer but it was a good. |
| 2005-12-04 22:34:05 |
My Vampire Mistress
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It was a pretty good story I think u need to be a little more creative .But hey at least you gave it a shot .So keep up the good work Just next time watch the grammar ok. Remember Vampires only like the night try doing it in a graveyard. Vampires Kick Ass! |
| 2005-12-05 13:40:17 |
My Vampire Mistress
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i thank you for all your ratings and comments and as i said befor since i barly made the 5 and over rtaiting i will write a sqeual to the story and improve it more...and i do ask you bare with me for iam a new writer and good things do take practice you cant roll over and be a great writer all at once but i do thiank you for the support positive and negitive |
| 2005-12-05 16:36:24 |
My Vampire Mistress
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That was a pretty good story. Kind of short and cut off at the end, but good. And to everyone else who is saying that vampires can't stand sunlight: it can't kill them. They just lose their powers during the day. |
| 2006-05-26 16:07:26 |
My Vampire Mistress
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"i was sitting in the bar drinking the last of my beer feeling pity for myself losing my job my wife leaving me and taking my kids away from me" . . . sounds like a country song to me. :-) like the cigarettes description. how did the girl know he'd go for it? i'd be interested in reading something more realistic in domination. for example, in a true S & M relationship, it is the submissive with the control. the submissive has a 'stop' word he/she uses if the pleasure (and it is pleasure) gets out of hand. nice fantasy though. |