| 2005-12-05 09:56:39 |
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gud story but they shud have continuded playin truth and dare and also used a betta ending :P |
| 2005-12-05 15:25:16 |
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Too short, not enuf sexual tension, just wham bam thank you ma'am. Needs more description, and activity. (sexual & otherwise). u gotta 6 for effort.
r |
| 2005-12-14 18:38:55 |
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Thanks for all the feedback, I'm writing a new story currently and hopefully you will read it, I've listened to your responses and taken them into consideration! |
| 2005-12-24 16:31:50 |
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i can't wait for the next one nice story but try to dicribe things a little better no offence 8/10 |
| 2006-01-02 23:19:04 |
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great story, the sequal should begin a few minutes before they kick the brother out and the parents walk in and join in.10/10 |