| 2006-01-16 01:47:39 |
how i got my cousin naked
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Bullshit, You need to learn grammar, and how to type. I like this story as it relates to a fantasy I had about my cousin when I was 14. I just think you need to paragraph this and start typing things out instead of using chat phrases like "omg". |
| 2006-01-17 10:22:22 |
how i got my cousin naked
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. . . so i started to read your story, and then i realized it was one long run-on sentence, so i kept going anyway, and then i saw that there was no capitilization or punctuation, so it was very distracting, and then i could hardly concentrate on the plot, so i ended up thinking it was a pretty shitty story |
| 2006-01-17 19:17:55 |
how i got my cousin naked
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YOU NEED TO LEARN HOW TO TYPE. |
| 2006-01-19 17:13:49 |
how i got my cousin naked
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Ah, I read like the 1st few lines and had to stop. Sorry but it just doesn't do anything for me. Take the other comments for advice, they are right. |
| 2006-01-25 04:31:53 |
how i got my cousin naked
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Uh!!!!!!!so wheres the story?? |