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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-07-03 01:51:24 | Her Very Bad Dog! | It has potential, but it's buried very deep. All the basics, like spelling and punctuation, need work. Basic details need work. Dogs don't have razor sharp teeth. They have strong jaws, but they don't have teeth like sharks. I don't think that anyone makes a D-cup push-up bra. German Shepards don't weigh 220 lbb. K-9 is a fanciful hominym for canine, not a real word. The scenario is a little far-fetched, but around here that's hardly a problem. If you organize your thoughts and your words better, you could develop a decent style. Please have someone proofread your next chapter. =Dreamer= |
| 2006-07-03 02:37:09 | Her Very Bad Dog! | Nice one, girl. Would love to read your next chapter. xoxo |
| 2006-07-03 08:09:11 | Her Very Bad Dog! | Good story Hannah, i look forward to the next chapter. |
| 2006-07-04 08:47:33 | Her Very Bad Dog! | You call Jack a former friend, and you said at one point you was enjoying it, so in the next story lets get jack back to being your friend. nice write! Doc. |
| 2006-07-05 16:41:58 | Her Very Bad Dog! | learn to endent a little bit more makes for less eye straining read. oh also story line not so good ok not good. |