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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-07-03 09:38:20 | ...And every girl in the family. | nice |
| 2006-07-03 10:05:42 | ...And every girl in the family. | Wow, that was possibly the worst dialogue I have ever seen. Its OK though, because the passive voice and incoherant story line pretty well conceal it. What exactly does it look like when an 11 yo has a sexy look in her eye? This is bad, very bad, I was looking through it for really bad selections and I got overwhelmed by badness, though "I'm only doing this because I love you" does stand out. The sex was unrealistic, the setting was confusing, at no time did you describe anything. I have no idea what Osama looks like, other than he has no friends and he is pretty average. 9 out of 10 people who click this link wont even finish the story. You need to do a better job of proofreading and clarifying your story. Kill the passive voice (look it up), describe stuff, and try again. |
| 2006-07-03 21:38:26 | ...And every girl in the family. | Better than the previous. BALLS! |
| 2006-07-03 21:47:19 | ...And every girl in the family. | isn't there supposed to be a hymen in there somewhere? A virgin pussy usually has one and it supposed to hurt when it gets broken by a penis, for a moment then u get into the real fuck. Made me cum. r |
| 2006-07-04 02:06:14 | ...And every girl in the family. | the sex part of this story was good could be better though a thank Archaic gave you great advice for your next story redo this one with the right gram and id give it an 8/10 but like this 4/10 try again and keep it up its good win you can read it and not have to stop and try to figer something out this story could be good |