| 2006-08-05 08:22:12 |
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0/10 |
| 2006-08-05 12:47:11 |
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When will these "authors" ever learn that a young man who is going see a dream come true when he's about to have sex with an older, fine-looking woman, it is he who will 'cum" long before the older female will. It's nonsense to make believe that a young guy can hold back and make proper love to a sexy woman. Young guys "cum" quickly, then maybe do better the second and third time around, but not during the initial foray. The story, incidentally, was fun to read. Not bad at all. 8/10 |
| 2006-08-05 14:33:44 |
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Thanks to all who gave me some solid advice and/or honest reviews. It was my first story and I wrote it around oh 3 am when I was half asleep and couldn't read my computer for shit. To the person who said uninteresting and the person who told me it was 0/10 give me a fucking reason why instead of just telling me it sucked. I know I am a damn good writer and I fully intend to keep writing as a career only not stories I am going to be a sportswriter. Anyway, the plot was kind of subtle but it's hard to make the reader realize that the kid had dreamed the exact thing the night before without being completely obvious and cheesy. And since you guys have given me such great ratings, seriously thanks for that it makes it all worth while, I will work hard to get part 2 up ASAP. |
| 2006-08-05 15:00:51 |
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Oh and the reason the young guy lasted longer was because he wasn't a virgin. I probably should have metnioned that before but it was my first story so next time I will try better to get that across. The kid was supposed to have had sex quite a few times because he was the captain of the basketball team and one of the more popular kids in his school. I will try harder next time to get some backround info in there. |
| 2006-08-05 15:01:12 |
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You're 6'4", etc. BECAUSE you;re the captain of the football team?
The teacher is a hot 21 YEAR-OLD? |