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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-08-11 22:19:41 | Vincent and Erin | I know that you want comments, so here i go: i like romance (points for romance). i like the teenager theme (points there too). It's excellent work for a teenager. 8/10 -- ashley barbie |
| 2006-08-11 22:25:57 | Vincent and Erin | The only thing I didn't like was how fast it went from one scene to the next. I did love how you switched from his to her point of view throughout the story. 7/10 |
| 2006-08-11 23:35:43 | Vincent and Erin | Thanks for the kind voting and words so far...I know the beginning was rushed, but I will make a more cohesive one someday. |
| 2006-08-18 01:31:16 | Vincent and Erin | ok... nice start for a first post here at xnxx. I'll toss you a comment, since you obviously put some effort into this. you wrote, during the sex in the last paragraph : " She kept moaning and went faster, causing Vincent to bite his lip in pleasure. Faster and harder she went, " you can do better here, for example. 'went' as a verb is too passive. i could toss you some alternatives, but i think you can come-up with some on your own. Keep writing, i'll keep reading. |
| 2006-08-18 04:25:40 | Vincent and Erin | Well, again, that part is the experiment. I was doing that part as quick as I could over an instant message. |