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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-08-18 22:53:03 | Rock Climbing_(1) | This is a real story, so please keep it in mind. I recorded the actual events, so i did not add any new bits etc. |
| 2006-08-18 23:06:32 | Rock Climbing_(1) | 7/10 new zealand is a country, not a county. :) -- just being a smart ass! not too bad, liked the ending. liked the rock climbing. didn't like the writing, which doesn't mean that you're not a good writer. you just need to keep practising. you have originality. that's my opinion -- take it or leave it. |
| 2006-08-18 23:43:21 | Rock Climbing_(1) | PARAHRAPHS!! I got bored as i got lost in the story. otherwise not bad. 7/10 |
| 2006-08-19 10:14:47 | Rock Climbing_(1) | You write very well. |
| 2006-08-19 11:14:20 | Rock Climbing_(1) | There was so much potential here, but it just turned into comma splice hell! I can't process ideas that are all jumbled together like that. It utterly kills the flow and turns an otherwise decent story into a chore. Your paragraph and sentence structure really get in the way of my enjoyment of this. |