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| Date | Story title | Comment |
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| 2006-11-04 17:07:21 | My Sister the Nun ch 4 | “You might check your over use of commas. The sentence you wrote (below) was made to show you were a writer or poet of some kind, however it was incorrect. Please read it again out loud. “while the story line was, well, -- possible the errors, mistakes, bad punctuation et al destroyed too much of the mood.” What? You didn’t complete the sentence. Any halfway decent writer would know that the sentence was incomplete. Oh! That’s right, you are not a writer … are you? By the way I might ask you, as you seem to be an expert, aren’t errors and mistakes the same or similar? You end your criticism with this sentence, |
| 2006-11-04 17:11:43 | My Sister the Nun ch 4 | Well possibly Mr. Spetre, you might begin with your own writing. specter (spelled specter not spetre) is some object or source of terror or dread: With your comments you appear to fit the definition well. I checked all the stories that were written by a spetre or specter, however I could find none in the listings. What is the old saying? At your age of seventy-one you should know it well. Writers; write. Those who cannot write; teach. Those who cannot teach, criticize. Apparently you were either an English teacher in Australia, (an oxymoron, as Australians don’t really speak English), or you were an editor. I hope you were an editor, as I have always hated English teachers, even Australian English teachers. |
| 2006-11-04 17:15:30 | My Sister the Nun ch 4 | Ch. 7: G'day, bithday "suit" is the term you were wanting. "suite" is a plush room in a hotel amongst other things. "wave" is what we do to acknowledge another's presence, whereas "waive" is to not insist on a "legal" right. you do yourself no favours by your sloppy writing, which is a pity because the story is interesting apart from the switch from jennifer/jessica to his sister. you know my name and my location. spetre Ch.8: G'day, well all good things have to end, eventually and, thankfully, so did this "story". while the story line was, well, -- possible the errors, mistakes, bad punctuation et al destroyed too much of the mood. fear not old guy, i'll read some more of your stuff and you'll likely hear from me again. Spetre |
| 2006-11-04 17:21:45 | My Sister the Nun ch 4 | Actually I did not invite people to review my writing. I allowed them to read it and comment about it. As defined below, under re-view-er, you are not writing for a newspaper or magazine. re·view·er (r -vy r n. One who reviews, especially one who writes critical reviews, as for a newspaper or magazine. “and don't slag off at your reviewers. you invited them. you know my name and my "location".” Actually I don’t know your name, as you spelled it incorrectly, and as far as your location, your use of the English language and your spelling of words like “favours”, “colours” put you in Australia or England. While the English are too civilized to write the way you do, Australians don’t seem to give a shit. |
| 2006-11-04 17:24:17 | My Sister the Nun ch 4 | The sentence read, “It had nothing to do with praying for world piece, it was making someone you loved happy, and enjoying what they had to offer in return. She believed that if everyone would do that, there would in fact, be world peace.” Ok, so I used “piece” instead of “peace” in the first part of the sentence. I used it correctly in the second part. Do I get half credit teacher? As far as the word “slag”. The only references I can find are to melting metal, and as in British Slang. “an abusive woman.” Apparently you in your wisdom and foreign tongue have found a new usage for the word. By the way it is not considered good writing to use the word “and” to begin a sentence. |