| 2007-01-11 11:39:53 |
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Alright, I know I've said this before, but, as usual, we seem to have new people complaining, so here goes, once again... First off, if you don't like this kind of story, why did you bother to read it? I mean, if you choose to read the story, you obviously found something that kept you reading. Second, while I don't agree with the practice, this story is fiction, and is written as fiction. As for the story, I found that at times it was a little bit confusing keeping the girls straight, but none the less, it was very well written, though I believe you should show more detail in the sexual acts next time. And I also hope that there IS a next story. 10/10 /| MidnightFiend /| |
| 2007-01-11 13:11:59 |
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This is a work of pure fiction written as if pedophilia were the norm rather than the exception. I didn't find it that sexy (giving it an 8), and have read other stories like this where the writer set out to shock so much that it would influence the reader in the other direction. If you have got your rocks off by reading this then keep it to yourself and within people who agree to it; and if you are offended, then say who you are, and we see your letters in the open press. But then, Oh!, you will have to admit that you read xnxx in the first place wouldn't you? |
| 2007-01-12 10:22:17 |
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Definitely not the worst story of it's kind. Although the perspective of the naive mother-of-6 is interesting, and the final scenes with the children are evocative, I'm afraid there could have been so much more offered simply by allowing the narrative to be controlled for a time by the children. Perhaps the youngest girl and her reaction to losing her virginity. Perhaps the son's anxiety at losing his anal cherry. So much more could have been done here, but the final product is still noteworthy. Congratulations on a story well written. I would like to request that someone, either the original author or a third party, continue the story, or at least consider revamping the tale as suggested.
Ciao,
H |