| 2007-09-18 15:24:48 |
Cheating is bad?
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W-what is w-with the stupid STUTTERING?! Its TERRIBLY distracting, and even someone with a stutter would not write the stutter IN to the dialogue. Overall, the story line is weak, and it's not very erotic, or dampening if you know what I mean. Between the irritating stuttering and the weak transitions within the even weaker storyline, I would retire this garbage altogether - there is no real interest in a second chapter. in fact, I've never been inspired to comment on ANY of these stories - EVER, but this one wa so frustrating and, just... BAD, that I had no choice. Please, stick with your day job, insofar as it's not in the writing, editing or publishing business!!!! An author you are not! |