| 2007-10-17 16:37:54 |
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so so |
| 2007-10-17 17:34:19 |
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i thought it was awesome |
| 2007-10-17 21:01:30 |
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gooddddddddddddd is all i can say but need to get your aunte to join next time 10/10 |
| 2007-10-17 21:42:17 |
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...your grammer kind of blows, and it seems like you were busy when you wrote this, and everytime you came back to it you lost your train of thought and it really left this story kind of jacked up...overall it wasnt bad though id say...6 or 7...not anything special and i doubt it is a true story the way you messed up so much, but hey if you want people to read it by labeling it as "true" feel free...i just read it cuz i was bored lol |
| 2007-10-17 22:02:26 |
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I don't know if it is inattention or what, but you continually left out complete words and it was very annoying. I had to fill in the blanks. You messed up an otherwise good story with bad grammar, missed words and sketchy thoughts. Fool! 7/10. |