| 2007-10-19 09:54:05 |
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I agree with the previous commentor as those that critised the grammar were complete retards. firstly, they made no sense by simply commenting on the supposedly "bad grammar" without giving concrete and reasonable examples. secondly, they probably have not written a story before, thus they are totally inexperienced in that field, which makes them unqualified to simply put down this story. what do they know about grammar and prepositions? absolutely nothing. |
| 2007-10-19 10:13:06 |
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Beachcummer, firstly, learn how to spell "grammar" before you take any stand. you could not even write a proper sentence, how would you have decided whether good grammar is important in sex stories? please caution yourself before you utter anything, as it could put you in an undesirably awkward situation. do you really think good grammar could potentially boost your sexual excitement? if your reply is a yes, i would take it that you have a grammatical cause for your erectile dsyfunctions. read the papers. |
| 2007-10-19 15:22:18 |
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I guess the premise of the story was good. And the sex was good. But the writing was not. Not only was the grammar awful but spelling and sentence structure were poor. I know this is a sex story and not classic literature. But bad writing distracts from the story. |
| 2007-10-19 15:56:54 |
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The thin g is he switches from past tense to present tense |
| 2007-10-19 21:45:23 |
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very very very good. |