| 2007-10-23 06:36:35 |
Inside Me: C05
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Lord, get it on. Start this story. This is a porn site, for heaven's sake. Jeeeeezus. |
| 2007-10-23 10:49:01 |
Inside Me: C05
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The story is good, but agreed. Total lack of sex. A small voyeur scene doesn't cut it. Here's hoping the next chapter has lots and lots of sex in it... |
| 2007-10-23 11:23:20 |
Inside Me: C05
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Your spelling went downhill in this one, and while I don't mind a good backstory, the eroticism is going downhill with each installment as well. |
| 2007-10-23 14:10:34 |
Inside Me: C05
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I have to agree with all the other comments so far. The story is well written and the lead-in has been great, but it's time to get started. Trust me....on this site, I have been yelled at for starting too quick AND for starting too slow. Your best bet is to work into the sex soon or your readers will stop following the story. Personally, I'll keep reading any well written tale no matter how long it takes to get to the sex. |
| 2007-10-23 16:14:45 |
Inside Me: C05
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i know you've heard it before but yes, there needs to be sex or at least something more than whats been going on. its been a great story, but the build up kills when it builds up to nothing. you're one fo the best sex writers on this site so please... get to the sex. |