| 2007-11-19 16:17:40 |
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very good over all. 9/10 |
| 2007-11-20 01:36:54 |
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Very good story line, keep it going. Please check the spelling as bad spelling and grammer will spoil a great story. |
| 2007-11-20 07:33:29 |
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I'm working as and when I can with the continued story. Thanks for the comments. Spellcheck will be used. :) |
| 2007-11-21 22:56:10 |
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Great to hear that you are making another! Would be wonderful to either have the girlfriend join? Maybe he leaves his girlfriend for the whore, fucking the whore in front of her? (I know she's not a whore, but it's just fun to call her that!) |
| 2007-11-22 02:27:43 |
No one underfoot.
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OUTSTANINGLY HOT! FUN AND PLEASURE TO READ. NEED MORE STORIES AS GOOD AS THIS ONE. |