| 2004-07-13 12:08:36 |
The Camp Nurse_(1)
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Quite the ego. And besides, you may pride yourself on knowing what plot development is, but you have a spelling problem. Do you know the difference is lose and loose for example? |
| 2004-07-13 12:14:44 |
The Camp Nurse_(1)
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You all should try the literotica web site if you like stories. |
| 2004-07-13 12:35:47 |
The Camp Nurse_(1)
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too fucking long!!!!! tooo hard to read, ever heard of a paragraph???? |
| 2004-07-13 13:29:07 |
The Camp Nurse_(1)
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Man! This thing is way too long. It's very run-on. Spelling is really bad. Too much info, it gets boring at times. I got so bored, I stopped reading 1/4 of the way through! Short, sweet, and right to the point is the key! |
| 2004-07-13 14:35:06 |
The Camp Nurse_(1)
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too long |