| 2004-07-18 22:06:23 |
The Camp Nurse_(1)
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that was crazy i loved it. u should write more stories and create a forum, honestly! |
| 2004-07-19 02:07:21 |
The Camp Nurse_(1)
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That story was great, keep up the great work and make more. Nothing wrong with the story from what I have read. It was awesome. And I agree with them came good to this one. |
| 2004-07-19 02:15:33 |
The Camp Nurse_(1)
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DOOD YEH!! that was awesome, man! best storry on this site! the only thing that u were missin was like an orgy with all the staffers. but wut was up with the secretary crying? dat was wierd. and why didnt Daine take off dose plungers? anyhho, keep on rocking (against bush!) |
| 2004-07-19 07:00:38 |
The Camp Nurse_(1)
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be specific n to the point |
| 2004-07-20 08:59:51 |
The Camp Nurse_(1)
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Nice short story that needs finished. As alot of others have said, grammar, paragraph usuage, or the lack thereof, and it also needs the author to be prepared to enter this into a short story collection when finished! Great read! |