| 2005-07-25 14:48:15 |
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Next time you come down from the hills,find a book store and purchase some books . After you've read a few,try to word your stories with a little more flowing english |
| 2008-04-07 20:20:46 |
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COOL |
| 2004-07-21 19:40:42 |
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Sufficiently cumworthy. A more apt titled would be 'Debbie gets gangbanged'. Lacking in emotional buildup, this story demonstrates how you would write when describing a gangbang you were viewing on a porno video. Orgies are difficult enough to follow on video but can become quite tedious in the written form. The author's descriptive skills are quite good when considering that the story is pretty clear and coherent despite the number of participants involved. Please write some more. |
| 2004-07-22 07:35:17 |
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Slow down in your stories develop a plot, otherwise good story |
| 2004-07-22 15:16:40 |
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great fucking story in pt.2 when debbie goes to that address have her mom walk in on them gang-banging her and she stares from a closet watching her little debbie get fucked and rubbing her own cunt |