| 2005-08-15 19:31:26 |
Starting young
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Good stuff |
| 2005-08-25 10:50:01 |
Starting young
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!!!!!!!!!!!!!incredible!!!!... |
| 2005-08-27 07:14:28 |
Starting young
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Not a bad story. Yes, I must agree, the grammar sucked. It was a little odd reaching the end, but all and all not bad. |
| 2005-08-31 23:47:10 |
Starting young
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pretty good story... all but that odd babbleing about pregnancy at the end ... but otherwise very good |
| 2005-09-25 14:07:18 |
Starting young
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ok. let me tell you this much. great story. love most of it. but the ending.... that was just plain strange. hell you might have even made it seem more erotic by smoothing it over but that seemed awkward and a desperate attempt of cramming more suggestions in. that and the grammar makes me wonder about the school systems. other than that great job. |