| 2005-01-09 19:02:45 |
Prostitute II
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I liked the story. A little More attention to grammar next time though. Good story though |
| 2005-01-10 06:39:57 |
Prostitute II
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wtf. first of all is it a 4 foot or 4 inch dick? second of all if it is a 4 inch dick it is boring and lamo trust me. thridly i think you better not write again.. simply because A) it is boring and B) if it is foot how the hell can a 12 y.o have a 4 foot dick thats like 1-1/2 metre(s). 3/10 sorry. |
| 2005-01-10 08:10:29 |
Prostitute II
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I try to give constructive criticism to all stories I read, but i just dont know where to start on this one! try reading some of the other authors on this page and look at their writing styes and techniques and try to form your own. also watch your grammar and spelling next time. id like to see a part three but only to see if you have improved. 4/10 |
| 2005-01-11 16:36:13 |
Prostitute II
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U r very confusing. |
| 2005-01-11 17:23:33 |
Prostitute II
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great |