| 2012-11-09 15:35:57 |
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too many mistakes to be able to read it ,go back to school |
| 2012-11-10 08:04:00 |
Sara's Protective Dad part 1 corrected
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i read the story for about 10 minutes then gave up..just did not make sny sense at all, plus spelling and grammar needs work |
| 2012-11-17 17:18:23 |
My father in law
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the spelling is lousy,so bad it ruins the story. |
| 2012-11-19 13:52:56 |
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a blank screen would have more fun and life in it,,,boring |
| 2012-11-24 15:04:04 |
Sister In Law Massage, Part 2
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definately needs to be continued,perhaps the wife joining in after her and the kids get home as well. |