| 2005-05-09 18:57:09 |
Summer Night
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you have got good potential. but the mistakes were distracting. I agree with Yo. |
| 2005-05-10 02:57:39 |
Summer Night
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nice story.write more. |
| 2005-05-11 20:51:30 |
Summer Night
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switches from first person to third person, otherwise ok |
| 2005-05-12 05:38:12 |
Summer Night
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I read part 2 1st and my clit came. I need a cock in me right now sooooo bad damn I need to be filled.... ps who the hell cares about grammar or punctuation ir spelling go with the flow or hit backspace.. damn gotta make a booty call now |
| 2005-05-13 04:08:36 |
Summer Night
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love this story ... who cares about grammer and spelling ... the story is what makes you hot and horny .... keep writing !!! |