| 2005-10-20 09:07:55 |
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Just a few tips: avoid using words like "after" and "minutes" and try using a spell check program before submitting the story. |
| 2005-10-20 23:29:32 |
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Oh man your all idoits, the writers an idiot, the commenters are idiots. In grade 4 they fail an essay in Ontario for 1 run on sentence. You had over a dozen, you had the poorest spelling and grammar. And got damn TUHing Lee Chin can't spell illiterate. The world is descending back into the dark ages, now on with the pillaging and raping. |
| 2005-10-25 14:45:16 |
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dont listen to what they say i think ur story is great....yes u do have some bad qualitys in the story but it was very good and made me very horny keep writing u'll get better!!! |
| 2005-10-27 01:14:17 |
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God.. you're going to go to hell for that one. |
| 2005-10-30 05:40:01 |
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need to work on spelling |