| 2006-05-29 19:54:28 |
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Grammer does not matter the spelling was ot we all knew what you were saying very hot made me cum |
| 2006-06-08 16:32:31 |
Pool Party_(3)
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fuck all of you it was awesome! |
| 2006-07-26 04:02:00 |
Pool Party_(3)
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it was ok i guess but it needed to be longer im sorry but it didn't even get me wet!! work harder on the next one |
| 2007-03-01 23:02:44 |
Pool Party_(3)
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aside from the MINOR grammer mistakes (that didn't take away from the story) i loved it! the whole orgy scene with the switching of the dicks was a little confusing, but fucking hot anyways. good job |
| 2007-05-11 16:32:09 |
Pool Party_(3)
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Bad, read bad. Gave it a 1/10 and that is a gift. The writer is evidently very young but can read other XXX stories and then make one up of his own. Too bad he didn't copy the spelling as well. |