| 2006-03-09 23:44:42 |
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hmmm to fix the ending, what you should have done is made Neil take control of the Colonel, have him LMM Jack such that Jack would graphically kill Cindy through sex. Then have jack remember it all. Then have the Colonel and Jack kill each other while Neil continues to go scott free.
MAYBE |
| 2006-03-09 23:57:21 |
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Sorry I hated the ending as well. Neil should have gotten the southern belle in the end because she was the only one that wanted him w/o the extras. Plus Cindy and Jake should have been made to be his slaves if they weren't smart enough to realize that Neil helped them get together in the first place. |
| 2006-03-10 01:09:50 |
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Great ending! I loved the fact that Neil did that to himself, fuckin asshole. Good story through n through. |
| 2006-03-10 03:53:34 |
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Great story
reader.... is that like a guest nick or something? |
| 2006-03-10 08:24:02 |
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yup hated the ending! perfectly great story up to that point! |